Reyna, Meron, AJ, and Cathy - Moment in Time Shared Writing Hangi

This is my moment in time writing that I did with my group. First we all made one individual one and then we made a collaborative verizon with my group! This is the writing:

By Reyna, Meron, Aj, and Cathy!

Cathy

In this picture it was a sunny day and there were a group of school kids and two adults. They could feel the little breeze hitting their skin. The kids were wearing blue and dark blue tops and a little dark blue or blue skirt. One of the adults was a lady, and she was wearing a white dress and the other adult was a man wearing black pants, grey boots, and a blue t - shirt with white writing on it. He also was wearing a hat. They were all looking at some strong people laying the try down into a pit. The kids and the two adults were observing the people preparing the hangi. In the background they could see trees, other people and a car. The car was a greyish colour. On the tray I see lots of food covered in foil, so it does not get dirty and also so it can cook better too! I think in this hangi  they are cooking foods like kumara, taro, pudding, fish, meat, and lots of other foods too! Because the tray had so much food in it they had to have lots of people helping. I can see a lady and six men helping prepare the hangi. In the pit I can see lots of green leaves. There are also green leaves at the bottom of the tray.

Well done Cathy, I love how you have used descriptive language in your work and how you have described the background. I really enjoyed how you made your work very detailed and how you have explained what you see in the image very clearly. One thing to work on next time would be to choose your spelling carefully but apart from that great job! Nice work Cathy I like how you have explained how it like to have a hangi. You did a great job describing what you have seen in the picture. Overall you did good from Reyna. Good job cathy I really like the word you used keep up the good work.

Collaborative Version

The HANGI! On a cloudy grey day there were a bunch of men holding a crate with wrapped up food. I think that the hangi was at a school because in the background you can see students in uniform. One of the adults was a lady, and she was wearing a white dress and the other adult was a man wearing black pants, grey boots, and a blue t - shirt with white writing on it. He was also wearing a hat. The 7 men are placing the crate of food down in a pit and are preparing the hangi. There is a pile of hot rocks and coal on the side which is used to heat up the food.   In the crate they must have put in taro, kumara, bread and pumpkin. On the side of the man in the white and black pants there is a pile of rocks to put over the food when setting the food on fire. They were all looking at some strong people laying the tray down into a pit. The kids and the two adults were observing the people preparing the hangi. In the atmosphere, there are streaks of smoke coming from the hot pit that make the area look quite like Rotorua. Some of the men who are holding the heavy crate, are wearing gloves to protect their hands from getting burnt. After a few hours the hangi was cooked. The food is in a big tray and underneath the food in the tray you can see there are taro leaves. The tray had so much food in it they had to have lots of people helping. There might be a burning ash smell and some smoke in the air which is why some of the men are covering their faces with a t-shirt. By Reyna, Cathy, Meron, and AJ!

Did you guys just copy and paste it from our independent one? We all copied some of our writing from all our individual ones and put it all together!